My Beautiful Facade

You made this? Familiar, parang kanta.

this sounds so emo...

insomniatic_poet wrote:

Beautiful Facade

Now i see you in a different light,

My Heart feels so despised.

Yes, everything is not what it seems,

My eyes you've really decieved.

You're my beautful facade,

Yes my Beautiful, decietful facade.

ganda ah...

nkow!!!npaka,poetic mu nman....
nice poem,digs deep...

tnx..hmm..mga diary entry ko lhat ng pinopost ko..mas mganda para sakin kasi kung it is expressed through a poem a nararamdaman mo..it is more expressed and felt rather than said..

Facade ........ let me see......it is The front of a building; esp., the principal front, having some architectural pretensions. Thus a church is said to have its facade unfinished, though the interior may be in use.....

What is your definition of facade?

elegante.......

Jackofalltrades wrote:

Facade ........ let me see......it is The front of a building; esp., the principal front, having some architectural pretensions. Thus a church is said to have its facade unfinished, though the interior may be in use.....

What is your definition of facade?

if typed in the computer or searched in the dictionary..it also means pretense..hmm...

xegben wrote:

this sounds so emo...

why? tatanungn ko muna xa xarili ko..jejjeje...dinededicate ko ito xa isang tao eh..hmm..i thought he was different but he was just like the rest...his looks and actions was really decieving..

nice poem...

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i'm okay
i miss you...

hhmmmm the poem is deep... the emotions tell about pain and being deceived....

tragic.... but might be a way of coping with the situation....

i appreciate the rhyming of the lines.... free-flow....

gani te..very deep jud
maka nose bleed...
hehehe
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im okay
i miss you...

to reme...

hehehe... yung message nya madaling intindihin... yung thoughts and emotions niya as writer nakakalunod... it talks about a feeling that has been bottling up and has come into the point of bursting.... kung sa novel pa, this poem is the denouement... kasi may realization na ... tho' pag binasa mo siya through and through, sa last part you'll see that there's hope and strength na.... as far as the words and meaning is concerned, i think average ang difficulty of pag-understand....

well-written and touching...


to jackofalltrades naman.... facade kasi in literature and in poetry means masking something or deception through creating a different person/thing instead of the real being/thing.

Kwistine wrote:

to reme...

hehehe... yung message nya madaling intindihin... yung thoughts and emotions niya as writer nakakalunod... it talks about a feeling that has been bottling up and has come into the point of bursting.... kung sa novel pa, this poem is the denouement... kasi may realization na ... tho' pag binasa mo siya through and through, sa last part you'll see that there's hope and strength na.... as far as the words and meaning is concerned, i think average ang difficulty of pag-understand....

well-written and touching...


to jackofalltrades naman.... facade kasi in literature and in poetry means masking something or deception through creating a different person/thing instead of the real being/thing.

thanks mam for the critic on my poem..jejeje...i really did not know it was something like that..jejeje..i was just writing so i could express what i feel..jejej..thanks po uli..

welcome... i have been writing poems way back in high school and i have come to sense lang something deep... ganun naman kapag we are expressing emotions through art eh (or literature...)

enhance mo pa skills mo...try mo haiku or free verse pa... Cheers!

thank you po uli..hmmm..

i'll enhance my craft and hopefully i can also write short stories also..i already know my problem coz sometimes i get too wordy..jejeje..thanks po uli mam kwistine!!!

ingat always..

don't mention it lec... try mo rin mag-read ng mga malalim na type ngliterature... kasi iba rin ang effect...

Kwistine wrote:

don't mention it lec... try mo rin mag-read ng mga malalim na type ngliterature... kasi iba rin ang effect...

actually ate gabasa jud ko..fave ko nga si Shakespeare at i've read Jane Austen's Pride and Prejudice..

jejeej..i hope to come up with my own style..hay hirap po..rami kasi ng iniisip..but poetry is one of my oulets..nest to reading books..jejeje..[i]